Comments for English Practice

Comment on Re-use by dt

dt — Fri, 21 Apr 2023 04:28:27 +0000

It seems that you don’t like commas but they do help to organise what you are saying when used well: Some time ago (comma) a charitable organisation asked me to help (delete) resolve this computer’s problems. Ultimately it was a (“It turned out that there was a” would sound less dramatic, I think) problem with the hard disk and since another person decided to donate a better computer to them (comma) I just helped them to set up that computer and they left the one that was not working with me. It was left lying around until recently when I figured that it is small enough to bring (delete) anywhere with me and (that) I might be able to use it with this group of children I am helping with their writing skills. So I installed a new system on an old SSD and voila, it worked!

Comment on An unusual experience by dt

dt — Fri, 21 Apr 2023 04:16:17 +0000

“he found himself having difficulty expressing himself and even stammering.” The two “himselfs” so close together makes the sentence a little awkward even though technically nothing is wrong. Perhaps “he had difficulty expressing himself and was even stammering”? Again, keep your sentences simple.

Comment on Nga Choy Kai ala Michelle Yeoh by dt

dt — Fri, 21 Apr 2023 04:11:27 +0000

It should be “a la” or rather “à la” and not “ala”. Perhaps stick to plain English?

Comment on My rug by dt

dt — Fri, 21 Apr 2023 04:06:42 +0000

“well, for a carpet, which commonly have Persian designs”: You mixed your numbers here—a carpet should be matched with “has”. I think what you want to say is “carpets commonly have Persian designs”. Keep it simple.
I thought it was a good piece. You managed to put in a lot of details and the story kept moving and that “toe” ending was unexpected and added colour. Good job!